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So I've taken my time;
watching to move,
prove why I'm waiting.

Living like a candle,
dimmly glowing,
moving slowly.
The wax dripping like tears.

I've slowly learned,
That I've too coldly burned,
And all I am is a wet wick.

Today I set off on a long long walk.
I don't care who comes to stalk me,
but I'm sure it's the same people who care.
Maybe for that half a person, getting up is rare.
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Genre: Grunge/Metal, possible Blues influence.

Eventually, he gets tired of waiting and keeping within the confines of Atlantis. Embarking himself on a journey (in more than one sense), he asks learns more than he finds until the ends.

(Oh BTW, this is the last Preview piece, because the only other track not represented is the end.)

Inspirations:
Rotten Apple- Alice in Chains
Bad Dreams- Trophy Scars
The Whale has Swallowed Me- Hugh Laurie version
The Saddest Song- Streetlight Manifesto
Come All You Weary- Thrice
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~NeuzaKC Aug 19, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
PERSON. WHY ARE YOU EATING LETTERS. THIS IS NOT A SOUP.

First things first, I'd really like to point out how hard it is to create a catchy song when there's no rhyming involved. You must keep this in mind as lack of rhyme occurs often.

"dimmly glowing,
slowly moving,"

I would personally change this to "moving slowly", as an aesthetic preference; it sounds better, it flows better, and whilst it doesn't rhyme better literally, it has a better quality to it, and it's not your usual -ing -ing rhyme.

"I don't care who comes to stalk me,
but I'm sue it's the same people who care."

Here, I think you could do without the word "me", and then stalk will rhyme with the previous line. You also repeat the word "care" and I'd tell you to change it but I can't find any other word with the same meaning at the moment because I AM NOT A WALKING THESAURUS. GOD. YOU'RE SO STUPID.

But anyways apart from that and the whole "sue" thing, it's very good. (:
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